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Delilah Draken ([info]delilahs_fics) wrote,
@ 2008-05-17 14:10:00

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Entry tags:'verse: highlander, 'verse: transformers, tamingthemuse, ttm: run 2, writing: fanfiction

Farewell
Title: Farewell
Author: Delilah Draken
Fandom: Transformers, Highlander
Character(s): Methos, Megatron, Optimus Prime
Sequel/Series: sequel to Guardian
Status: Finished
Disclaimer: The stories are mine. All the rest - characters and locations you've heard of in TV shows, movies, books etc - belong to their respective owners. I am just borrowing them.
Summary: Old rituals and older promises.
Author's Note: prompt #95 – Mime at tamingthemuse



Farewell

by
Delilah Draken



Silence. Deadly silence, only disturbed by the rasping breath of tired pedestrians that minutes before ran for their lives. The kind of silence that reminds of the grave and mourning what is forever lost.

Somewhere a baby cries. The hushed words of the mother are no comfort for the young life.

He stands there, right in the middle of the devastated street, and wonders why the military men do not attempt to cover up what happened here. After all, there is a giant alien robot lying on the ground. More than one, he has to correct himself, but doesn't really care because there is only one here at the moment whose face he knows. And that only through pictures.

Slow, oh so slow his feet carry him towards the dead mountain of metal and weaponry. He ignores the other giants who walk around, making sure that their enemies' lives have truly been terminated. He ignores the frantic attempts of one soldier to barricade his way. He even ignores the boy scrambling back from the fallen god.

“Here you have fallen,” he speaks. The words are loud and and clear, like the whisper of an accomplished theatre actor. “Here you now rest.”

His fingers touch the cooling metal, follow the barely recognizable scars carved into an alien skin. He writes a poem of farewell onto the dead one, the sweat on his fingers serving as ink.

The words to the old song for the brave warriors, heroes fallen to destruction while on a quest of justice, resurface from the depths of his memory like the silken breath of a lover's touch. The lost language caresses his lips.

“Megatron,” he says in the clipped and barbled tones that he learned such a long time ago. Back then in the hidden valley where he was told stories of a glorious empire as old as time itself.

“Fare thee well, Lord Protector. Your children will look after the Prime for you.” With these words the ritualistic good-bye is at its end, his lips pressing a last kiss on cold metal.

Behind him someone flinches. He feels it more than he sees it and when he turns around there stands one of the giant robots, an arm extended as if its only wish was to touch the empty remains of a dead shell.

The Prime, for there is no other possibility of who else it could be in his mind, looks sad. How comforting then that the alien is painted in the mourning colours of red and blue.

The man known as Adam Pierson, who once was lord over life and death, can only shake his head at the display. There is no place for him in this play. There never was. And thus he walks away, back to what hopefully is his still intact hotel room and the chance of reuniting an old friend with a dead comrade.

The only problem in this plan is that he has not the slightest idea where the red-eyed flyer has gone to. free page hit counter



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Your Annon. Haunter
(Anonymous)
2008-05-17 05:10 pm UTC (link)
Thinks that she's in love with you.

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Re: Your Annon. Haunter
[info]delilahdraken
2008-05-17 05:14 pm UTC (link)
*bows*

I'm honoured.

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Re: Your Annon. Haunter
(Anonymous)
2008-05-18 02:10 am UTC (link)
It's all the... Those old ways lost and forgotten even to the Cybertronians in this war. Perhaps some mechs would deny Megatron this, the final and proper send off of the High Lord Protector. Prime wouldn't, for he still calls him brother, in the very end, but perhaps forgot it for his own. And yet...the ritual and candance--From alien and fragile lips sprung something of their own, but so separated for so long it is alien to even the source.

Honor given in ignorance, for Methos knows not what Megatron did and what he betrayed, but Death cares not.

My god.

And then Methos is like: Okay, done here, now where did HE get to? *dashes off*

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[info]wolfalice
2008-08-29 04:14 pm UTC (link)
So, hi again :)

pedestrians that minutes before ran for their lives - I think that should be "who" instead of "that".

Slow, oh so slow his feet carry him - "Slowly" instead of "slow".

“Here you have fallen,” he speaks. - "He says" would sound more natural.

The words are loud and and clear, like the whisper of an accomplished theatre actor. - You mean like a stage-whisper? If that's what you mean, it would be better to phrase it like that, instead of vaguely. Also - is he really talking in a stage-whisper? If not, just leave it as "loud and clear" (though that phrase is a little cliched anyway).

clipped and barbled tones - I'm pretty sure "barbled" isn't a word, and I'm not sure what you were actually going for...

the empty remains of a dead shell. - The "a" makes the sentence vague, and implies that you're not talking about Megatron's corpse, which I can only assume you are. Anyway, the two images are probably slightly redundant, in that "empty remains" and "dead shell" are too similar in meaning.

The Prime, for there is no other possibility of who else it could be in his mind, looks sad. - The phrasing of this sentence feels off, as well. I'd rephrase it as something like: "The Prime - for there is no doubt in his mind as to this mech's identity - looks sad." Although, "sad" seems like a little bit of an understatement... (Red and blue are mourning colours? Is that a canon detail from Highlander?)

and the chance of reuniting an old friend with a dead comrade. - Not really sure what's happening here. He's going back to his room and to the chance to reunite a friend and a dead comrade? Who are these people? Unless you mean Megatron and Optimus, in which case, what is this chance of reuniting them that he's returning to? Based on the final sentence, though, I'd guess Starscream's one of them... Do you mean a comrade of Starscream's, or of the protagonist's? I'm basically just a bit confused, but maybe it would help if I knew the other canon here XD

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